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Five times one thousand is the number of steps that I’ve taken on this long road,
It is the number of thoughts that have passed though my head,
The number of breaths that I have taken.

Five times one thousand is the number of beats in this path,
It is the number of trails laid before me,
The number of forks in the road.

And although I am lost, on this track unknown,
In this forest so old,
Filled with all of my doubt, suspicion, fear and solitude,
I know I will find my way through.

For five times one thousand steps have been taken here already,
Five times one thousand people have been here before,
On the same path that I am now following on the floor,
But those five times one thousand hearts will never beat quite like mine.

And my five times one thousand steps will get me closer to the finish line,
My thoughts are going to become clearer,
My breath is going to race faster.

But all of this will come in time,
For now I am here alone,
This beaten path will eventually take me home.
©2009 *mylovestory
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Preview picture is by =Goodfoot42 [link]

Here is my second entry into =RawEm0tion's 12th contest. The theme was five times one thousand and it had to relate back to the picture.

I also really like this one too. So I hope they both do well in the contest, and I hope all of you like them aswell!

Just want to give a small shout out and thanks to my friend (who's not on DA) with his help on the third sanza.

I also just wanted to write a little blurb about what I was thinking when writing it:

Being lost, but still having a kind of sense of where to go. Like the railroad tracks, you don't know where they're going to lead you, but you keep following them knowing that eventually you'll find your way home. So, it's like being lost, but not really at the same time because you have that sense that you're going to be alright.

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:icontsukibana-yamai:
Wow, this is such a deep and meaningful piece. I interpreted a sense of uncertainty and fear versus the need to keep moving forward. A lovely poem! heart:

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Yeah, I was throwing ideas back and forth with my friend and we both came to the conclusion of being lost, but still having a kind of sense of where to go. Like the railroad tracks, you don't know where they're going to lead you, but you keep following them knowing that eventually you'll find your way home. So, it's like being lost, but not really at the same time because you have that sense that you're going to be alright.

That's what I was trying to go for in this.
Thanks dear! :heart:

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:heart: Wow, man! I really loved it. Very very well written! :heart:

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Thanks darlin!

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I like how you incorporated the idea of multiplication - made it seem bigger than just saying "5000". Plus, I like the idea of being lost, but having a road to follow, and th certainty that you will find your way home - optimistic. :)

Good luck!

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:icontuttlebird:
This is a really beautiful piece, well done and good luck with the contest.

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{ makes it easier to reach for the stars I guess }
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Thank you :)

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Life doesn't give you the people you want, it gives you the people you need: to help you, to hurt you, to love you, to leave you, and to make you into the person you were meant to be.

:damphyr:~mylovestory
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Thank you so much!
I tried really hard to make it seem like that, and I'm glad it came across like that.

Thanks hun! :)

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Life doesn't give you the people you want, it gives you the people you need: to help you, to hurt you, to love you, to leave you, and to make you into the person you were meant to be.

:damphyr:~mylovestory
:icontuttlebird:
You're welcome :)

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She said that it’s we who are rushing passed the wind
and that the sky is really below our feet

{ makes it easier to reach for the stars I guess }

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